12/21/09

Official Kissing Day Blogfest

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This is a scene from my WIP novel, Mythos. Our protagonist, Zydeco, is one such Mythos, a former mythological creature who was banished to our world, where he has become a sixteen year old human. In this scene, he is at the prom with his girlfriend Tameina. Having been a Griffin for most of his life, he's not adept at dancing. The incredibly sweet Tameina has him on the dance floor and is trying to make him feel comfortable.

“It’s easy,” said Tameina, teasing my neck with cool hands as we moved. “Just go along with me.”

I nodded. “I can do this.” When I gazed down at her, I realized I was looking down her dress.

“Hey,” she said, freeing a hand and cupping my chin with it. “I’m up here.”

“Sorry,” I said as an involuntary giggle escaped. Shutting my eyes for a second, I contemplated just how uncomfortable dancing made me feel, and vowed to avoid it in future.

But when I opened my eyes, her heart shaped face had broken into an endless smile. “Kiss me.”

I took a breath, as if I’d forgotten how to do so, but now remembered. And then I leaned in and kissed her. We moved with the music, unconsciously, eyes shut. The touch of her skin on mine and her delicate scent filled my senses. The dance floor was empty except for us.

A tap on my shoulder and a throat clearing in my ear made me open my eyes and pull back. Mr. Borkin stood beside me, something twitching beneath his thick beard. “Why don’t you two take a short break?”

Hand in hand, Tameina and I walked dreamily to the table. Maybe this dancing thing wasn’t so bad.


Okay, I'm not looking for any critiques, and in fact, I just wrote this scene a couple of days ago. It surely needs tons of work, but it's a start. It was between this kissing scene and the scene in which Zydeco realizes he quite likes Tameina and asks her to the prom.

9 comments:

Sara ♥ said...

aw. Kissing at the prom. I remember those days :-)

Tricia J. O'Brien said...

I love this concept of mythological creatures turned into teens. Yikes! And Mr. Borkin's tap is priceless. Thanks so much for joining in the blogfest. I think it was a fun day.

sherrinda said...

It's never too late to join the party and I'm so glad you did! There's nothing like a prom to bring out some romance! You did GOOD!! Thankis for adding to the fun!

Iapetus999 said...

Hey another dude chimes in to the party!
Nice scene, def went smoother than my prom.

Amalia T. said...

Sounds like a really interesting premise! Nice scene! Thanks for sharing this!

Jennifer Shirk said...

Awww...that was so sweet and cute. Perfect YA first kiss. :)

Jay said...

Thanks guys! It's funny how, despite getting older, I remember these little prom-ish details.

giddymomof6 said...

Is that why guys actually went to prom--they could look down the girl's dress? LOL! It's all beginning to make sense to me now... hmm...

Good scene, it really didn't need much editing at all! I'm impressed, especially as it's only a couple of days old!

Jenni James

Annie McMahon said...

Hi, Jay! You just won another blog award at my place: http://dutchhillnews.blogspot.com/2009/12/circle-of-friends-award.html

Happy Holidays!